Location Transport

How does this introduction sound.?

i searched all around the yahoo answers and managed to do a introduction. how does this look? correct me plzz Introduction I am going to take you on a journey through time and transport from the classic to the modern. On far of days when roads were stony man travelled round on shanks pony, this proved to be slow and so of course he learned to mount and use a horse. Later, not satisfied creative brain invented vehicles and more vehicles in different uses. And yet again not satisfactory brains had further problems such as comfortableness, safety and sometimes the look. The manufacturers tried make the vehicles better by doing anything which could satisfy the society and in this journey you will be seeing the transport from 1880 to the present day consisting of the problems, developments and how it had all ended, with satisfaction or still facing problems. There have been many changes, concludes and developments in transports. New transport system have been found and some have been ended and also previously found vehicles have been improved. I will be discussing mainly about the railways, trams, motor cars and public transport and their developments, difficulties and on occasionally diminishments. how can i make it better?

Public Comments

1. Lots of spelling errors...On far OFF days, not of days and there are more. Punctuation is bad...after the first pony you need either a semicolon or a period, not a comma. What does "not satisfactory brains" mean? Many changes, CONCLUSIONS, (not concludes). Overall the ideas are pretty good...but you need to go through it again and correct your spelling and grammar. Make sure your tenses match! Good luck!
2. Its hard to tell what the reader is going to learn or understand from what they are about to read. Make sure you understand what you are about to write about. The topic of transportation is important, dont get lost in all the car bashing that is going on these days.