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What do you think of my poem?

Hello thanks for taking the time to read this. The following poem is one which I have entered for the Poetry Live competition, and I just wondered if you could give me your opinion on it please. The human condition What of us apes, An epidemic case called the human race, We be with two arms, And two of these transporters, Opposable thumbs for flipping those quarters, A little thing called our ticker, So no need for any grave digger, All that Vitamin D make them too happy, The rest gotta rely on some cocoa bean, That be feeding our addictive personality, What a shame it be cloggin up your artery, Every one of us the same we would be, Were it not for a little thing called reality, A concept of the human mind, Another symptom of our kind, It gives words to my tongue, It helped me grow from being young, Although I may be a strange contraption, I don’t really mind this human condition.

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1. woah, you wrote that ? cool ! kinda strange..but so awsome :) Please answer my question its kinda a poetry type thing..pretty pleaaaase !! i need english expertiece (misspelled i know)